Grey Star the Wizard (27 page)

(
110
) Replaced ‘lost.’ with ‘lost,’.

(
112
) Put semicolons between the items in the list of overheard conversation and changed ‘Dreams.’ ‘Save’ to ‘Dreams. Save’. Replaced ‘warriors, and’ with ‘warriors and’.

(
113
) Replaced both occurrences of ‘cliff face’ with ‘cliff-face’. Replaced ‘outstretched hand’ with ‘outstretched hand,’.

(
114
) Replaced ‘power of Prophecy’ with ‘Power of Prophecy’.

(
116
) Replaced ‘Sorcery,turn to 226’ with ‘Sorcery, turn to 226’.

(
117
) Replaced ‘war cries’ with ‘war-cries’. Replaced ‘fury the’ with ‘fury, the’. Replaced ‘staff and’ with ‘staff, and’. Replaced ‘despatch’ with ‘dispatch’.

(
118
) Replaced ‘below and’ with ‘below, and’.

(
119
) Replaced ‘tighten, then’ with ‘tighten, and then’. Replaced ‘suddenly, wilt’ with ‘suddenly wilt’.

(
122
) Replaced ‘care you’ with ‘care, you’. Replaced ‘minutes the’ with ‘minutes, the’.

(
123
) Replaced ‘eyeslits’ with ‘eye-slits’.

(
124
) Replaced each occurrence of ‘jailer’ with ‘gaoler’. Replaced ‘Jailer’ with ‘Gaoler’.

(
125
) Replaced ‘jailer's’ with ‘gaoler's’. Replaced ‘open and’ with ‘open, and’. Replaced ‘the Keys’ with ‘the Gaoler's Keys’.

(
127
) Replaced ‘excited mob roar their’ with ‘excited mob roars its’.

(
128
) Replaced ‘Calacena mushrooms, and’ with ‘Calacena Mushrooms, and’. Replaced ‘this power’ with ‘this Power’. Replaced ‘or do’ with ‘or if you do’.

(
129
) Replaced ‘Shan, ‘She’ with ‘Shan. ‘She’. Replaced ‘ante-chamber’ with ‘antechamber’.

(
131
) Replaced ‘Shadakine empire’ with ‘Shadakine Empire’.

(
132
) Replaced ‘on to’ with ‘onto’. Replaced ‘crossbowman and’ with ‘crossbowman, and’.

(
133
) Replaced ‘Cut-Throat’ with ‘Cut-throat’. Replaced ‘death, and’ with ‘death and’.

(
136
) Replaced ‘lightly, and’ with ‘lightly and’. Replaced ‘danger,turn to 345’ with ‘danger, turn to 345’. Replaced ‘this power’ with ‘this Power’. Replaced ‘or would’ with ‘or if you would’.

(
137
) Replaced ‘stairs, which’ with ‘stairs which’.

(
138
) Replaced ‘cliff face’ with ‘cliff-face’.

(
139
) Replaced ‘far sinister’ with ‘far more sinister’. Replaced ‘eyeslits’ with ‘eye-slits’.

(
140
) Replaced ‘sail-ships’ with ‘sail ships’. Added a period to the end of the illustration's caption.

(
142
) Replaced ‘jailer's’ with ‘Gaoler's’.

(
143
) Replaced ‘this power’ with ‘this Power’.

(
144
) Replaced ‘escape and, as’ with ‘escape, and as’.

(
145
) Replaced ‘long range attack’ with ‘long-range attack’.

(
146
) Replaced ‘floor, entrances’ with ‘floor — entrances’. Replaced ‘the undergrowth’ with ‘the undergrowth,’.

(
148
) Replaced ‘on to’ with ‘ onto’.

(
149
) Replaced ‘screams, ‘a’ with ‘screams. ‘A’ and added to the choice text ‘ or have defeated the Kleasá within three rounds’.

(
150
) Replaced ‘prys’ with ‘pries’. Replaced ‘zero, or lower’ with ‘zero or below’ and reversed the order of the choices. Replaced ‘above zero or’ with ‘above zero, or’.

(
151
) Replaced ‘sulphur’ with ‘Sulphur’. Replaced ‘saltpetre’ with ‘Saltpetre’. Replaced ‘crystals’ with ‘Crystals’. Replaced ‘different power’ with ‘different Power’.

(
152
) Replaced ‘open and’ with ‘open, and’.

(
153
) Replaced ‘power of Sorcery’ with ‘Power of Sorcery’. Replaced ‘this power or’ with ‘this Power, or if you’.

(
157
) Replaced ‘this power’ with ‘this Power’.

(
158
) Replaced ‘pain, due’ with ‘pain due’. Replaced ‘pounds and’ with ‘pounds, and’.

(
159
) Replaced ‘power of Sorcery’ with ‘Power of Sorcery’. Replaced ‘power of Alchemy’ with ‘Power of Alchemy’.

(
161
) Replaced ‘A Silver Ring’ with ‘Silver Charm’. Replaced ‘A Broadsword’ with ‘Broadsword (Weapon)’. Replaced ‘2 potions of Laumspur’ with ‘2 Potions of Laumspur’. Replaced ‘A coil of Rope’ with ‘Coil of Rope’. Replaced ‘power of Alchemy’ with ‘Power of Alchemy’. Replaced ‘backpacks and’ with ‘backpacks, and’.

(
164
) Removed the parentheses. Replaced ‘Azan river’ with ‘Azan River’.

(
165
) Replaced ‘creature you’ with ‘creature, you’. Replaced ‘zero or less’ with ‘zero or below’.

(
167
) Replaced ‘you,’ ’ with ‘you!’ ’.

(
168
) Replaced ‘west and’ with ‘west, and’.

(
169
) Replaced ‘crossbowman, who’ with ‘crossbowman who’.

(
170
) Replaced ‘acid’ with ‘Acid’.

(
171
) Replaced ‘these Items’ with ‘these items’.

(
172
) Replaced ‘these powers’ with ‘these Powers’. Replaced each occurrence of ‘power’ with ‘Power’.

(
175
) Replaced ‘power young’ with ‘power, young’. Replaced ‘willpower’ with ‘
WILLPOWER
’. Added a period to the end of the illustration's caption.

(
176
) Replaced ‘jailer's’ with ‘Gaoler's’. Replaced ‘on to’ with ‘onto’.

(
178
) Replaced ‘or would’ with ‘or if you would’.

(
181
) Replaced ‘elemental plane’ with ‘Elemental Plane’.

(
183
) Removed the line of periods from the first item. Replaced ‘1 jar of Ezeran crystals’ with ‘1 Jar of Ezeran Crystals’. Replaced ‘with sulphur)’ with ‘with sulphur).’. Replaced ‘A Pestle and Mortar’ with ‘Pestle and Mortar’. Replaced ‘1 bottle of Naptha’ with ‘1 Bottle of Naphtha’. Replaced ‘1 vial of Graveweed essence’ with ‘1 Vial of Graveweed Essence’. Replaced ‘1 vial of Alether’ with ‘1 Vial of Alether’. Replaced ‘1 bundle of dried Azawood leaves’ with ‘1 Bundle of dried Azawood Leaves’. Replaced ‘seeds’ with ‘Seeds’. Replaced ‘these Items’ with ‘these items’.

(
184
) Replaced ‘cliff face’ with ‘cliff-face’.

(
186
) Replaced ‘away hoping’ with ‘away, hoping’.

(
187
) Replaced ‘tortuous’ with ‘tortured’. Replaced ‘visited’ with ‘been arrested at’. Replaced ‘Jailer’ with ‘Gaoler’.

(
189
) Replaced ‘can not’ with ‘cannot’.

(
190
) Replaced ‘way Grey’ with ‘way, Grey’. Replaced ‘north, and’ with ‘north and’. Replaced ‘south, and’ with ‘south and’. Removed ‘at the front of the book’.

(
191
) Changed the second choice to lead to
Section 314
instead of
Section 150
and the third choice to lead to
Section 288
instead of
Section 320
. These sections were unreachable in the original and make much more sense in the context of the story. Replaced ‘astral plane, and’ with ‘Astral Plane and’.

(
193
) Replaced ‘A Pestle and Mortar’ with ‘Pestle and Mortar (Backpack Item)’. Replaced ‘A packet of Ezeran crystals’ with ‘Packet of Ezeran Crystals’. Replaced ‘1 jar of Yabari ointment’ with ‘Jar of Yabari Ointment’. Replaced ‘seeds’ with ‘Seeds’. Replaced ‘the Items’ with ‘the items’.

(
194
) Replaced ‘waist, with’ with ‘waist with’. Replaced ‘closer and’ with ‘closer, and’. Replaced ‘Shan but, overwhelmed’ with ‘Shan, but overwhelmed’.

(
195
) Replaced ‘street, which’ with ‘street which’. Replaced ‘sign, which reads.:’ with ‘sign which reads:’.

(
197
) Added a period to the end of the illustration's caption.

(
199
) Replaced each occurrence of ‘power’ with ‘Power’.

(
200
) Replaced all instances of ‘alley-ways’ with ‘alleyways’. Added the following choice: ‘If you have the Magical Power of Prophecy and wish to use it,
turn to 64
.’ This is to parallel
Section 40
.

(
201
) Replaced ‘your powers’ with ‘your Powers’.

(
202
) Replaced ‘eyes and with your hands raised you’ with ‘eyes, and with your hands raised, you’. Replaced ‘elemental plane’ with ‘Elemental Plane’.

(
204
) Replaced ‘leg, the’ with ‘leg; the’.

(
206
) Replaced ‘fungi enables’ with ‘fungi enable’.

(
207
) Replaced ‘light and’ with ‘light, and’. Replaced ‘enemies, who’ with ‘enemies who’.

(
208
) Replaced ‘crossbowmen with your Wizard's Staff, at long range,’ with ‘crossbowmen at long range with your Wizard's Staff,’.

(
209
) Replaced ‘vial of Pink Liquid’ with ‘Vial of Pink Liquid’. Replaced each occurrence of ‘Items’ with ‘items’.

(
211
) Replaced ‘Evocation or wish’ with ‘Evocation, or if you wish’.

(
213
) Replaced ‘length you’ with ‘length, you’.

(
214
) Replaced ‘breath’ with ‘breathe’. Replaced ‘power of Prophecy’ with ‘Power of Prophecy’. Replaced ‘jailer’ with ‘gaoler’.

(
215
) Replaced ‘fight but’ with ‘fight, but’. Replaced ‘1 potion of Randalim's Elixir’ with ‘Potion of Rendalim's Elixir’. Replaced both occurrences of ‘herb warden’ with ‘herbwarden’. Replaced ‘A Pestle’ with ‘Pestle’. Replaced ‘3 Tarama flower seeds’ with ‘3 Tarama Seeds’. Replaced ‘Sealed pouch of Calacena mushrooms’ with ‘Sealed pouch of Calacena Mushrooms’. Replaced ‘power of Enchantment’ with ‘Power of Enchantment’. Replaced ‘the Items’ with ‘the items’. Replaced ‘on to’ with ‘ onto’.

(
216
) Replaced ‘barbs, plunging’ with ‘barbs plunging’.

(
217
) Replaced ‘It it's’ with ‘If it's’. Replaced ‘table. ‘they're’ with ‘table. ‘They're’. Replaced ‘narrow and’ with ‘narrow, and’.

(
218
) Replaced ‘well and’ with ‘well, and’. Replaced ‘Village’ with ‘village’.

(
221
) Replaced ‘ante-chamber’ with ‘antechamber’. Replaced ‘intones and’ with ‘intones, and’. Replaced ‘mark it as a Special Item’ with ‘mark this Backpack Item’. Replaced ‘wall and’ with ‘wall, and’. Replaced ‘compartment, roughly’ with ‘compartment roughly’. Replaced ‘stone, and’ with ‘stone and’.

(
223
) Replaced ‘alley-way’ with ‘alleyway’. Replaced ‘gutters and’ with ‘gutters, and’.

(
224
) Added a period to the end of the illustration's caption.

(
225
) Replaced ‘half-way’ with ‘halfway’. Replaced ‘closer and’ with ‘closer, and’.

(
229
) Replaced ‘wish, at long range, to attack’ with ‘wish to launch a long-range attack on’.

(
230
) Replaced ‘back and’ with ‘back, and’.

(
231
) Replaced ‘toes and’ with ‘toes, and’. Replaced ‘long-range’ with ‘long range’.

(
232
) Replaced ‘bloody you’ with ‘bloody, you’. Replaced ‘you and’ with ‘you, and’. Replaced ‘defer’ with ‘deter’.

(
233
) Added a period to the end of the illustration's caption.

(
236
) In the last sentence of the first paragraph, replaced the comma with ellipsis and followed the sentence with ellipsis.

(
238
) Replaced ‘another, then’ with ‘another; then’.

(
239
) Replaced ‘staff’ with ‘Staff’. Replaced ‘true and’ with ‘true, and’.

(
241
) Added a period to the end of the illustration's caption.

(
243
) Replaced ‘Jailor’ with ‘Gaoler’. Replaced both occurrences of ‘jailer’ with ‘gaoler’. Replaced ‘jailer's’ with ‘gaoler's’. Replaced ‘jailer's Keys’ with ‘Gaoler's Keys’.

(
245
) Replaced ‘reply; ’we’ with ‘reply. ‘We’. Replaced ‘bargain and’ with ‘bargain, and’. Replaced ‘says confidently’ with ‘says, confidently’.

(
247
) Replaced ‘continue ‘In’ with ‘continue. ‘In’.

(
249
) Replaced ‘amazement you’ with ‘amazement, you’. Replaced ‘gulleys’ with ‘gullies’. Replaced ‘top, and’ with ‘top and’. Replaced ‘steep, and’ with ‘steep and’. Replaced ‘Shan, who’ with ‘Shan who’.

(
250
) Replaced ‘strange pale’ with ‘strange, pale’.

(
251
) Replaced ‘least, that’ with ‘least that’. Replaced ‘street, leading’ with ‘street leading’.

(
252
) Replaced ‘value and’ with ‘value, and’. Replaced ‘picks and’ with ‘picks, and’.

(
253
) Replaced ‘half-way’ with ‘halfway’.

(
254
) Replaced ‘eye you’ with ‘eye, you’. Replaced ‘plants and’ with ‘plants, and’.

(
255
) Replaced ‘unharmed and’ with ‘unharmed, and’. Replaced ‘skid, and’ with ‘skid and’. Replaced ‘on to’ with ‘ onto’.

(
256
) Replaced ‘air, we're’ with ‘air; we're’. Replaced ‘close, that’ with ‘close that’. Replaced ‘say; ‘judging’ with ‘say, ‘judging’. Replaced ‘seconds you’ with ‘seconds, you’. Changed the choice which led to
Section 306
to lead to
Section 107
instead. The original book led the reader to an inappropriate instant death section. This may not be the most elegant way to correct this problem, but it seems to be the best compromise. Replaced ‘Quoku, as’ with ‘Quoku as’.

(
259
) Replaced ‘feet and’ with ‘feet, and’. Replaced ‘Magri and’ with ‘Magri, and’. Replaced ‘sweet, a’ with ‘sweet — a’.

(
260
) Replaced ‘chase and’ with ‘chase, and’. Replaced ‘fearful creature’ with ‘fearsome creature’.

(
261
) Replaced ‘pounding and’ with ‘pounding, and’. Replaced ‘back and’ with ‘back, and’.

(
263
) Replaced ‘veins and’ with ‘veins, and’. Replaced ‘leg and’ with ‘leg, and’. Replaced ‘clearing, surrounded’ with ‘clearing surrounded’.

(
264
) Replaced ‘contents you’ with ‘contents, you’. Replaced ‘trepidation you’ with ‘trepidation, you’. Replaced ‘Special Item’ with ‘Backpack Item’ (to be consistent with
Section 209
).

(
265
) Replaced ‘power and’ with ‘power, and’.

(
266
) Replaced ‘shoulder’ with ‘shoulders’. Replaced ‘speed; a’ with ‘speed: a’. Changed the second choice which led to
Section 333
to lead to
Section 330
instead. Added a period to the end of the illustration's caption.